Antler to Antler - Part 5 (Revised)
#7 of Antler to Antler
A/N - Normally I don't like to revise work I've already published, but because the intent of Antler to Antler was as a screenplay which I have yet to produce, the original posting was always intended to be viewed as a draft rather than the finished work. I have since went back and made some alterations to the ending of Antler to Antler which I think greatly improves the story, so I decided to share it here. In this version, I think Bracken is given more of a sense of being willing to fight for Fern, while still maintaining Fern's sense of strength to make her own choices.(No promises that this is the finalized version.)
EXT. FOREST - DAY
Bracken stares at a tree truck. Shifting his hoof through the dirt, he charges. He collides with the trunk, RAMMING it again and again. Wood SPLINTERS, sweat rolls down his face.
Finally, the trunk gives way, and the tree falls, CRASHING into the forest floor. Bracken stares at the empty trunk, BREATHING HEAVILY.
EXT. FOREST CLEARING - DAY
Bracken marches into the clearing, tall and proud. Eyes turn toward him. Fern watches from the distance.
BRACKEN: I am Bracken, and I declare Fern as my doe.
SILENCE.
Then CHUCKLING. Bracken turns to see Stag marching up to him. Stag shakes his head.
STAG: I see. Decided to claim my doe for yourself. (Eyes darkening) Back down now. Or prepare to be pulverized.
Bracken stares Stag straight in the eyes.
BRACKEN: Like I said, I declare Fern as my doe.
Stag glares back. Something rekindles in his gaze, long confined.
STAG: A real buck, I see. Okay. I accept your challenge.
Stag CHARGES! He's across the clearing in seconds, antlers locked with Bracken's.
Bracken and Stag stand head to head, eyes alight with fury.
STAG: Fern is mine.
BRACKEN: Never!
They drive each other back, twisting heads from side to side, throwing each other into the dirt, only to have them recover with renewed effort, neither willing to back down.
Fern watches from the sidelines, guilt filling her expression.
MAPLE (V.O.): Look at them. Filled with so much masculinity. It's like they've lost their minds.
Fern turns her head, struggling to watch.
Bracken, filled with such aggression, rams Stag full force, causing him to stumble. Stag looks down at his hooves, shocked. Before he can recover, Bracken drives at him again, and Stag is thrown off his feet.
Bracken stands over Stag, nostrils FLARING, his EYES FILLED WITH FURY. Fern CRIES out and has to look away.
FERN (V.O.): If you can't fight for me, then maybe I deserve a buck who will.
The voice ECHOS across the clearing.
ECHO.
ECHO.
ECHO.
All the way to Bracken, still standing over Stag.
STAG: Do it. Show everyone you've won. Show everyone you've won your doe.
Bracken goes still.
FERN (V.O.): Nothing more than a prize to be won.
ECHO. ECHO. ECHO.
The fury drains from Bracken's face, his expression softens. He pulls his attention away from Stag, and finding Fern in the crowd, meeting her gaze. She bows her head.
Instantly, STAG'S ON HIS FEET. He rams Bracken, driving him into the ground, throwing up dirt. Bracken CRIES OUT.
The dust clears. Bracken looks around dazed, his pelt all shredded. Stag stands over him, Fern watches in horror.
STAG: You shouldn't have hesitated. Now get up. Finish what you started.
Weakly, Bracken positions his hooves under him, raises himself up slowly, stiffly, his joints CRACKLE...
And then he looks at Fern.
FERN (V.O.): All I can do is stand on the sidelines. (Echo, Echo) Nothing more than a prize to be won.
ECHO, ECHO, ECHO.
All the energy drains from Bracken, he slumps back down to the ground.
STAG: I said, get up!
Instead, Bracken just lays there, breathing slow, shallow breaths.
BRACKEN (V.O.): It does seem ridiculous that we have to let a competition choose who we love.
ECHO, ECHO, ECHO.
STAG: Now!
Stag rams his antlers into Bracken, throwing him tumbling across the clearing.
Stag steps up to him once more.
STAG: Are you a real buck or not? Fight!
YOUNG BRACKEN (V.O.): I'm gonna be the strongest buck ever.
ECHO. ECHO. ECHO
FATHER (V.O.): Son, it's not about being the strongest, it's finding a doe who you love and being able to stand strong for her.
ECHO. ECHO. ECHO.
And again--
FERN (V.O.): If you can't fight for me... (echo, echo) then maybe I deserve a buck who will.
ECHO. ECHO. ECHO.
Bracken looks at Stag, standing over him, strong and tall. All goes silent in the clearing.
Stag looks at Fern and gestures her over.
STAG: Come on babe, It's over. You're mine.
Fern hesitates.
FERN (V.O.): All I can do is stand on the sidelines. (Echo, Echo) Nothing more than a prize to be won.
A hoof HITS the ground. ECHO, ECHO.
Stag's eyes light up.
Bracken gathers another hoof under him (ECHO, ECHO), new life fills his body...
BRACKEN: Fern is not just a prize to be won.
Bracken prepares another hoof, his body shaking but determined.
And then Fern steps up to Stag's side, weary but sure.
SILENCE.
Bracken falls back to the ground, lowering his head.
STAG: No, I saw you. You're better than this. Now prove it!
Bracken just looks away briefly, then looks at Fern.
BRACKEN: No, Fern's chosen you to protect her.
Instantly Stag EXPLODES IN A FRENZY OF FURY, ramming Bracken again and again.
STAG: You will fight me like a real buck, and I will win this fight like the buck I am!
Bracken CRIES out as he is sent rolling once more. Fern CRIES out in horror.
Stag steps up to Bracken.
STAG: You're pathetic. You will never be a strong buck.
Bracken struggles to look up.
BRACKEN: Maybe I don't want to be.
Stags eyes ignite with pure rage, he's about to ram Bracken again when Fern leaps in the way.
Stag halts. Fern looks him straight in the eyes.
FERN: Enough.
Stag taken aback, watches as Fern turns to Bracken and helps him to his feet. Bracken staggers a little on uneven legs, and she helps support his weight.
Then Fern looks at Stag.
FERN: I choose Bracken.
The clearing goes still.
Finally--
STAG: Wha-? You can't do that.
Fern just ignores him and turns to Bracken, still uneasy on his feet.
FERN: Come on Bracken, let's go.
Strengthened by her presence, Fern leads Bracken limping across the clearing. The other deer watch them go in utter befuddlement.
Stag puts a hoof forward, but Fern turns to face him, shielding Bracken with her own body.
FERN: It's over Stag.
And Stag steps back into his place.
As Fern and Bracken reach the treeline, Stag regains one last breath--
STAG: You're a disgrace of a buck Bracken! A weakling and a cheat!
Bracken looks at Fern gratefully, then glances back at Stag.
BRACKEN: I didn't come here to earn your respect.
With a HUFF, Stag turns his back on them, shaking his head.
And with that, Fern and Bracken enter the treeline, disappearing into the forest beyond.
FADE OUT