Dark Ones: Lola's experience
Hello, this will be my second story on here, and once again I am in an area I have no clue if I am good at or not. Like before, brutal honesty is the rule, not the exception.
Lola was out of breath as she ducked into her home. The trip home was always a tiring one after the Dark Ones came. As she regained her breath, she thought back to how her village was before. It was a tiny village, far from most cities. The people liked it that way. They were hybrids by birth, long descendents from the Originals. Her tribe happened to be fox hybrids. Humans and hybrids had been getting along for awhile, thanks to a truce between the governments. However, it was just paper. Hybrids were still mistrusted by most people, a mutual feeling. Then it happened. Strange things were happing all over. In the cities, random fires were being started, while small villages' crops were being destroyed. Eachside blamed the other. It was about to be a war when the Dark Ones showed themselves finally. They were demons of all shapes, sizes, and kinds. Each one was different as well. Some were peaceful, others were just scared, some wanted a home and food, and then some were just evil. The peaceful ones help fight the evil ones off, while scared hid. The ones you really had to look out for were the hungry ones. None seemed to have a set shape or diet. Some were creatures who fed off meat, distinguished by claws and fangs. Others were strictly herbivores. Then some had a different taste.
As Lola walked to a mirror, she could see why one such demon had chosen her. As a hybrid, she had most of the characteristics of a human. The main things that seperated her was two ears, shaped in triangles, all the ruby red fur she had, and a bushy tail. Other than that, she could have blended in. She was about 5' 5', weighed about 160 of muscle, and had a nice bust. Her hair was down to her shoulderblades, and was bright red. As she looked, she heard movement outside her door, then the banging started. The door shook violently as something beat against it. She ran over to hold it shut, but it was too late. The door flew off the hinges as snakelike appendages came flying in. Lola turned around to run, but was caughtby her ankles. Two of the appendages wrapped around her ankles and calves, as two more pulled her arms behind her. She would have fallen, had the appendages not lifted her a foot into the air. she was turned towards the door in time to see a black blob roll in. The appendages were coming from the blob, and as she watched, more started to form and come towards her. she started to squirm, but realised it was useless. The demon had her, and wouldn't let go. She opened her mouth to scream, but found out it was a mistake. The second her mouth was open, an appendage flew in and made any screaming useless. It swelled until she couldn't bite down, then became rock hard. It was in far enough screaming wasn't possible, but she could still breathe. Then she noticed the taste. It was sweet, in fact it tasted like chocolate. It was coming from an ooze the demon emited. She sucked a little and realized that the more she sucked, the more it emited. This was to plan for the demon, for now she was distracted. It didn't waist anytime, and forming it's appendage to a blade, removed her clothes. Then, it formed two appendages to look like cocks, and started to emit a special ooze. This one was meant to enhance it's mates pleasure ten fold, but it had found out it works twice as well on humans. Also, luckily, it made an excellent lube. As the demon started to slide one appendage between Lola's legs, the other one went a different way. Before Lola knew what happened, one appendage went into her pussy, the other in her ass. She screamed, or tried to, but it was not from pain. The ooze worked beautifully as she was filled with pleasure. She saw why she was being held in air, for had she been on the ground, her muscles would have failed. The demon went at a fast pace, quickly working her towards an orgasm. Due to the ooze, it didn't take long. Lola was swept in a wave of pleasure as she orgasmed. It was the most powerful one she had ever felt. As her juices started to flow, the demon glowed and grew, absorbing them all. Once Lola came down from her orgasm, the demon started again, going faster this time. Once again, Lola quickly came to an orgasm, and again the demon glowed and grew. It went like this all night, until finally Lola could not have any more orgasms. The demon was now 3' tall, about 28" around, and 2' thick. It was the third type of hungry demon. As it lowered Lola to the ground, she passed out. The sun was rising as it rolled out and back to it's layer. But it had left Lola a gift, a part of it and it's essence. It was a demon of lust, one that fed off pleasure. And now Lola had a part of it in her soul.
Please tell me what you think. If it is received well(or not. Great thing of being an author is I am free to do my work) there will probably be more showing what happens to Lola, as well as the other demons.