Dan and Jane--Finish her! (script)
Hey! Did you every want to see how Finish Her would have looked like? Well, here's the script (in case any of you are curious as to how I write my comics. Keep in mind, minor edits tend to happen when it's actually drawn out.) http://www.sofurry.com/page/186635 page 1 here Page 1:
A rat named Daniel in raver gear is playing video games against a heavy-set
hyena named Janette who wears geek clothes; Batman shirt and everything. Janette
has just lost. They're playing games on a 'Sumo' beanbag lounge chair.
Janette: "Fuck fuck FUCK!!"
Daniel: "Too late, Janey-girl."
TV: "Player one wins!"
Janette throws her controlled down in disgust. Daniel is grinning.
Janette: "Renna is SUCH a cheapass."
Daniel leans over, teasingly smiling at her in victory.
Daniel: "Boobs are POWER!"
Daniel then looks up, rubbing his chin and looking innocently thoughtful.
Daniel: "Now GOSH... what were we playing for again? Oh yeah..."
Daniel gestures behind him, Janette already walking towards the kitchen, her
posture looking exaggeratedly grumpy.
Daniel: "GET IN THAT KITCHEN AND MAKE US SOME SANDWICHES, WOMAN!"
Janette, in the kitchen, is smiling through clenched teeth. She can't see what
Daniel is doing.
Janette: "Keep it up, ratboy... and you'll be WEARING yours!"
Daniel undresses quickly while Janette is in the kitchen and unable to see what
he's up to.
Daniel: "And make sure you use extra meat!"
Janette comes back into the doorway holding a paper plate with two sandwiches on
it.
Janette: "You know I always like extra---"
Janette looks shocked, her eyes wide. Daniel is standing in front of her almost
naked, his hands behind his head. He's still got on his arm stockings and
goggles and collar, though the collar now has a leash dangling down to his
penis. Daniel is ripped.
Daniel: "Yeah... I know."
Janette drops the paper plate and sandwiches with a splat. The pair just look at
eachother for a moment.
Janette finally says, her hands still in the position they were when she dropped
the plate,
Janette: "... I think I just got a hard-on."
Daniel approaches Janette who has drawn her hands up to her chest. She looks
properly embarrassed but can't take her eyes off him. Daniel puts his arms
around her, and Janette gives a dreamy smile. Page 2
Daniel: "You really should think of a more imaginative blog password."
Janette: "HEY!!! You... weren't supposed to know..."
Daniel puts his face closer to hers.
Daniel: "That you were fantasizing about me?"
Daniel kisses Janette, who grabs a hold of his back, digging her claws in a bit.
She really gives into the kiss, her hands wander to his butt.
Daniel smiles at her, and takes off her glasses.
Daniel: "We've only been best friends for 3 years. How come you didn't tell me?"
Janette: "I kind of thought you'd be grossed out... being a living Adonis and
all."
Daniel leads Janette to her bed, the two sit down on it.
Daniel: "You didn't think that maybe I was trying to impress you?"
Janette smirks, and then grabs a hold of the leash, and pulls Daniel down onto
his back. Janette mounts him, though she's fully clothed still.
Janette: "That was STILL a dirty trick, you rat bastard."
Janette and Daniel kiss again, and then Daniel puts his hands on her butt.
Daniel: "So, are you going to join me here, or just watch?" Page 3
A bit of time has passed. Janette is naked, and under Daniel, who is sucking on
her breasts. Janette's hands are on his head, holding him down on her. Her eyes
are looking down at him dreamily.
Janette: "Oh... Dan..."
Daniel's hand moves down between her legs. Janette responds by arching her back
and holding on tighter.
Janette: "Oh yes! Touch me... you don't know how much I've wanted this..."
Daniel looks down at Janette, holding himself over her, his hand is still down
between her legs. Janette looks like he's pleasuring her as he talks to her.
Daniel: "I've been waiting for this a long time too. You're just as sexy as I
thought you'd be."
Janette stuffs Daniel's head down between her breasts in response. She's smiling
down at him, looking flustered.
Janette: "Merf... shuddup, you."
Daniel pops his head down from her breasts, Janette is left holding his goggles.
Janette: "Hey!"
Daniel's face is right in front of her vagina. Her enlarged clit is unhooded and
presented to him. Daniel begins to lick her clit, which makes Janette push up
her hips and grab at his head.
Janette: "AAAH!"
Daniel starts to stroke at himself while he licks Janette. Janette has wrapped
her legs around his head and is holding on for dear life.
Janette: "Oh Dan! Yes! Harder! Don't stop!" Page 4
Daniel is now fully erect as he strokes himself and Janette is thrashing around,
holding his head in place on her.
Janette: "Ahhh! AAAH!! I-I can't-take... much more!"
Daniel sucks on Janette's clit, and Janette throws her head back, screaming.
Janette: "OHH!! Y-you're... m-making me cum!! AHHH!"
Janette goes limp then, looking exhausted while Daniel crawls up her body again,
grinning down at her. He's at her breast level, cupping one of them.
Daniel leans down and licks one of her breasts again.
Daniel: "Now to FINISH you."
Janette: "H-huh?"
Daniel jerks his penis into her. Janette clenches her eyes and clings to
Daniel's shoulders.
Janette: "Aaaahh!"
Daniel: "Ungh! Oh God, Janey... you're so tight..."
Daniel starts to fuck Janette missionary style, her legs are wrapped around his
waist, and he's sucking on her breasts while he's inside her.
Daniel then switches positions so that he's behind her, her hands are on the
headboard of her bed, while Daniel rubs her clit while he's fucking her. His
other hand is on her breast, and he's biting her neck. Janette then mounts him
again, her head thrown back and sitting upright.
Janette: "Ahh! Ahh! Dan! I'm gonna..."
Daniel grabs her hips and thrusts up harder into her. Janette then falls forward
and clutches him to her chest, falling onto him. She lifts her head and screams
out as she does so.
Janette: "Aaaaaaaaaaaaahh!!!" Page 5
Daniel is once again on top of her, and is holding her wrists down as he bites
her neck. She has her legs wrapped around him again, and both look like they're
covered in sweat.
Janette: "Ahh! AAH! I ... I can't..."
Daniel: "Say it..."
Janette looks into Daniel's eyes, still gasping and rubbing her breasts up
against his chest.
Janette: "Wh-what?"
Daniel: "Say you want me to cum in you..."
Janette throws back her head, gritting her teeth and writhing under him, her
legs holding him tight.
Janette: "Please God yes! Oh cum in me, baby! I want to feel it!"
Daniel: "Oh yes, Janey... been holding it in so long..."
Daniel and Janette lock bodies, Daniel throws his head back, eyes clenched in
pleasure. Janette has a hold of his butt and is pulling at him, her own head
thrown back.
Daniel slumps over Janette who kisses his neck, holding him tight. He pulls his
soaked penis out of her and rolls beside her, looking at her. She looks spent.
He's smiling adoringly at her.
Daniel: "Flawless victory."
Janette's eyes snap open, and she smirks at him. She pulls on his leash, to a
sitting position, where she's now sitting in his lap, looking him in the face.
Both are smiling at eachother.
Janette: "ROUND... 2"
Daniel grins as Janette pushes him back down.