A Big Surprise
#1 of Tough Times
This is my first story, it's probably gonna be 2-3 parts... I was thinking of merging it all into one, but I was hoping to get some criticism on the plot and the writing style before I get into the... special bits... of the story. I guess, since I've seen this on every other story, I might as well include it:
There will (eventually) be M/M yiff in this story, do not read if you are under 18. :D.
"Cmon! Push! Harder!" screamed Joe. His broad frame was towering over Dylan, although he was a good three or four inches shorter. "Last rep!" Dylan was almost crying from the burn he felt in his upper body. "Nice job, bud," Joe replied, and helped Dylan up. He then chuckled and yelled "Only 75 more pounds and you'll be able to bench as much as I can!" This comment spurred laughter from almost everyone in the weight room. Dylan was already enough of an outcast, being the only husky in the room other than Joe, and being the worst shape of all the weightlifters. The only reason he was able to gather the confidence to start working out there was because Joe told him that they could be workout partners. Dylan got butterflies in his stomach thinking about that day again, when his huge crush asked if he wanted to train with him for the high school hockey team. Joe was beautiful - although he was 5'9", he was stronger than all of the bulls in the weight room and anyone could tell when they saw his massive chest, ripped core and bulking arms. His fur was a reddish-bronze, with white on his chest and inner thighs, which was uncommon but very appealing to Dylan. However, Dylan's favorite feature of the husky were his soft blue eyes. When Joe smiled, Dylan melted on the inside, and he always had to hide what he felt to make sure Joe nor anyone in the weight room noticed.
"Hello? You okay bud?" Dylan suddenly heard, and realized that he had spaced out thinking of Joe. The bulls in the weight room began to laugh again. He noticeably blushed in embarrassment and said "I gotta go home, I'm making dinner tonight" which he realized after was a horrible excuse because it was only 4:00. He darted out of the weight room.
"Man, what a weird guy... sometimes I wonder why I asked him to even come up here," Joe murmured to the other guys after Dylan left. Unfortunately, Dylan forgot his water bottle and overheard everything as he was on his way back to pick it up. He ran to his locker, fighting back tears. "How could I have even thought he liked me! Hes probably not even gay!" Dylan told himself. "and even if he was, I would be his last choice for sure." Dylan hated his body. He was just over 6 feet tall, and a little bit overweight. He had icy blue fur everywhere except for his genital area which was cream colored. He packed up his clothes and books, and headed home.
"Finally, now I can be alone," Dylan said with a sigh. Normally this would be the perfect time for him to relieve him self of the pent up sex drive he got from being with his weight room crush, but the mood was killed by what Joe had said. He decided to plop down in front of the TV and watch a cheesy movie.
Later that night, of his friends, a fiery red vixen named Casey (although everyone called her Sugar), called Dylan up. She was the only person that he could trust to tell about his sexuality.
"Oh my god! Dylan! I have like the best news ever!" Sugar yelled into the phone.
"Uhh, hey, what's up Sugar..." Dylan was quickly cut off.
"There is this TOTALLY amazing party going down tomorrow, and we are going!"
"Oh... awesome," Dylan replied.
"Hey! What's wrong babe? You seem down." Before Dylan could reply, Sugar said "Ah. Guy trouble. Don't worry, I know a friend of a friend will be there, who, from what I hear, is to die for... and he's single!" Dylan's heart skipped a beat. He had never been in a relationship with a guy, and was now getting a little nervous. He always hated and loved how Sugar could read his emotions like a book.
"Yeah... sure I'll come," Dylan mumbled.
"Sweet, pick me up at 8 tomorrow, kay?" and with that Sugar hung up.
Dylan had a glimpse of hope after the phone call, but as usual he let his thoughts bring him down. "He probably wont even like me," he thought to himself. He decided to get to sleep early; he was aching pretty badly from the workout.
The next day at school passed by quickly for Dylan; his mind was on other things as usual. After school, as Dylan was leaving, someone yelled "Hey, where are you going bud?" Dylan turned around and saw Joe smirking, showing off his fangs.
"Uhh, I'm going out tonight, I can't come to the gym."
"Nah, don't worry about it, I'm going to the movies with my girlfriend anyway, so I can't go either." Dylan's heart almost visibly sank, as he just saved himself from blurting out "You have a girlfriend?" He said "Ah, cool, hope you have fun," and turned back to leave. He felt a paw on his shoulder, and turned again slightly, only to be inches away from Joe's muzzle. Joe whispered "Sorry if I offended you when we were working out, you know when I said that you couldn't bench press as much as me... You are making great progress, keep it up." Dylan was struggling to formulate a sentence, he was lost in Joe's baby blue eyes again. He stuttered "I-Its cool..."
"Great, see you monday!" Joe said and patted him on the back. Dylan sighed and walked home.
When he got home, he has a surprise visit from his dad. "Hey Dylan, how have you been?"
"Hey dad, weren't you supposed to be on a business trip or something"
"Um, yeah... I got back early", Dylan's dad said very suspiciously.
"Oh... Okay, cool... Hey do you mind if I borrow the car tonight? Me and Sugar are going to the movies."
"Yeah, sure, just call me if any plans change." Dylan ate, watched some TV, and then got ready to go to pick up Sugar.
"Sweet, you finally showed up, let's go!" Sugar yelled When Dylan picked her up. As they were driving, Sugar said. "So, you nervous to meet this guy?"
"Not exactly, I'm just ready for rejection." Sugar slapped him playfully.
"Don't be so damn hard on yourself Dylan, you haven't even met the guy!" Dylan laughed, he knew that she was right.
"Okay, fine." he replied.
"Park here, the house is just a block north," Sugar said and they made their way to the party.
"What up Sugaaaa!" yelled a lion at the party. He came over and gave Sugar a hug that almost crippled her. It was Zach, the guy hosting the party that was a friend of Sugars, that Dylan had met once or twice. "Hey Dylan, nice to see you could make it." Before Dylan could respond, he was pulled away by Sugar. "Come meet my friend Reese!" She elbowed Dylan and murmured, "He's the one with the friend." They walked over to a pretty hulking wolf with grey fur. "Hey Reese, this is Dylan. Where's your friend at?" Sugar said with a wink. She always knew how to embarrass Dylan. "Oh, lemme go find him, wait here." Reese replied.
Dylan looked around the place. It was pretty packed. He recognized a few faces from his school, but that was about it. There was an awesome sound system in the house pumping some trace that was decent, and you couldn't take a step without finding alcohol within arms reach.
"You have to be kidding." Dylan heard over the music. He turned around and immediately his jaw dropped. Reese felt that this was getting kind of awkward, so he said "Sugar, this is Joe, Joe, meet Sugar," and smiled.
Criticism would be greatly appreciated, as long as it is constructive :).