You Know What They Say About Curiousity- Commission for Fredwritz

Story by White66 on SoFurry

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#7 of Commissions

Now...this was a lot of fun to write. Not my usual kind of story or the story I would usually write but that just made it more fun to play around with the concept. Really..who doesn't like monsters and creepy stuff and things that go bump in the night? Perfect for a scary..if belated..Halloween story.

A big shout out to Fredwritz for this idea. He certainly has a good eye for the creepy. Hoping you enjoy this piece my friend. Looking forward to doing business with you again.

I'm still open for commissions and requests if you want something written for yourself. Long or short. Multiple characters. Multiple genres. Most kinks considered. Don't hesitate to drop me a line if interested.


'Man bro, you weren't kidding. This place is fuckin' spooky.' Alex couldn't help letting out a little whistle, the shorter of the two hyenas letting his eyes roam over the walls around him marked with grime, cobwebs and peeling paint in equal measure. Mostly due to the fact that no one had lived here for years, decades really. This old ramshackle house sitting about fifty miles outside of town, smack dab in the middle of the forest, looking like no one had been anywhere near it for the same length of time. Which they hadn't. For good reason. Local legend had a few good tales about this place, perfectly good to recant a long way away when the beers have been flowing and you feel safe with walls between you and the night.

It's certainly obtained a almost mythic reputation on campus, even freshfurs having heard the stories before they even joined. Campus legend says that the Universities most exclusive fraternity offers free membership to anyone willing to stay the night there alone. Yet somehow that never seemed to tempt anyone. Not even experienced students like Alex and Conner.

Best friends and brothers, the duo having considered it a no brainer to attend the same university. A decision made all the sweeter as it turned out they would be sharing a dorm. While not twins they were almost as close as that bonding in relationship as well as appearance. From outside, most people thought of Alex as the younger brother of the two. And he certainly looked the part. Although Alex was little shorter and fresh faced than Conner, they were still evenly matched with their matching mottled grey fur and cropped black hair. Okay, so Alex was dispossessed of the slightly more macho frame of his friend, he could still cut a dashing air that had netted him crushes across campus to equal his roommate.

'Didn't I say so? It's perfect.' Conner nodded. 'Plenty of space to set up what we need. I bet we can easily find somewhere to set up the generator and the sound system. The rest is just about setting up atmosphere. Some candles, pumpkin lanterns and we will be good to go.'

'If we can actually get anyone out here.' Alex said slowly, giving voice to the doubts that had been tickling in the back of his head. 'We might think it's perfect. But what if the stories keep furs away? Stories of dozens of people vanishing without trace at the hands of some kind of monster can have that effect you know.'

'Of course we will. No one believes those old stories. Not really. Just local folklore to scare the kids. Besides, that group of chicks from Beta Gamma Zeta had a sleepover here a few months back. And they were fine.' Conner waved his paw dismissively.

'They said they did.' Alex countered. 'How do you know they didn't just crash at one of their houses playing video games in their undies all night?'

'Maybe they did. I'd have liked to see that. Anyway, makes for a good story. Come on, we have to look over this place properly. If it all looks good, I want to get back and bring the generator up here today. See if we can get it installed.'

'Fine.' Alex said, still not looking convinced.


Alex's doubts and disquiet faded the more he saw of the house. Conner was right of course. He was always the voice of reason when Alex got too down on himself. Just like he was the same foil for Conner when he got too over confident. Between the two of them they balanced out rather nicely.

They certainly had plenty of space for a perfect party, the previous owners having pretty much gutted the place, not just of furniture but of all the fittings as well. Even down to the kitchen, everything from the cupboards to the sink having been ripped out, leaving little more than a couple of twisted pipes that had most likely carried water from whatever passed as the main water supply back then. Since this place was too old to have been connected to a gas main. Or any kind of main. As he had expected he hadn't seen anything approaching a modern power socket. Hence why they had both agreed for the need for a generator.

'Yup. This place is pretty much perfect. Easily enough room to set up the generator outside, run the cables through a window to the sound system and we can fill this place with some kicking tunes.' Conner strolled into the remnants of the kitchen with a happy grin. 'Good thing we didn't plan on having any hot food here.'

'Yeah. Snacks all the way.' Alex agreed. 'At least we can use ice to keep the drinks cold. If your dad lets you use his cool bags.'

'I think he's just happy we don't want to have this party at his place.' Conner grinned. 'A few bags is a small price to pay.'

'What's it look like upstairs?' Alex asked casually. Casual or not, that didn't stop Conner fixing him with a smirk.

'Why? Thinking about inviting along that sweet Alison you were eyeing up at the mingle last night? Maybe going upstairs to get past second base? Well..that's not going to work. Everything up there has been ripped out too. Not even a mattress on the floor. Still, there is still one of those old swing chairs out in the porch. Perfect for a little making out.'

'It's not always trying to get into a girls pants with me.' Alex said with a grin. 'Sometimes I'm just about a little sweet cuddling and hugging. Of course, if my paw starts to wander and she seems to like it, who knows where it might go. She certainly didn't complain when I slipped my paw under her shirt while we made out.'

'You do like the slow game, don't you? I'd have already sweet talked her into deep throating me by now. Mmmm...she would be putty in my paw, the very paw that would be curled into her hair as I face fucked her.'

'I like it when a girl wants to suck me off rather than forcing her.' Alex teased, knowing full well that Conner was teasing him. While his brother could be a little more forceful than him when it came to sex, he would never actually force a girl to do anything. He was just very good at finding the girls that liked a bit of control.'

'Well..none of that is going to happen if we don't get a move on. Come on, we've still got a long drive back.' Conner said firmly as Alex fell into step behind him. 'We just grab that generator and...shit.'

That exclamation came as Conner stumbled and nearly fell, only his powerful legs keeping him standing against his sudden headlong momentum.

'Jeez, easy dude.' Alex guffawed. 'Seriously, it would not do anything for your street cred to die here having cracked your head open.'

'Very funny.' Conner grumbled rubbing his ankle. 'Can't think what I tripped over though. I've walked through here a dozen times. Guess there must be something under this rug.'

'So what if there is?' Alex asked. 'Let's just...and you have to have a look. Seriously, with that curiosity I sometimes think you are part cat.'

'Just a quick look.' Conner replied, throwing the rug back with a thumb that raised a huge cloud of dust which tickled Alex's nose instantly. 'Oh..hey. Look at this. Looks like a cellar door. Cool.'

'And...why exactly is that cool?' Alex sighed.

'More party space maybe.' Conner said, his paws already grasping the ring caked with rust and grime. Before Alex could even say anything he had taken the strain and tugged the solid wooden hatch open with a screech of rusty metal that sent Alex's teeth jarring.

'Who would want to party down there? Looks kinda creepy to me.'

'Now who's a cat?' Conner grinned. 'Come on, scaredy cat. Just a quick look and we are out of here.'


The rickety steps creaked and groaned with each step Alex took, each footfall conjuring images of him plunging through the complaining and questionably solid wood to..well whatever lay beneath him. Thankfully those fears of being plunged into some black abyss proved baseless as Alex stepped both rattled and relieved onto the solid stone floor of what seemed to be some kind of sprawling basement. 'Just for the record. If we get trapped down here, I'll fucking kill you.'

'Relax, man.' Conner grinned. 'It's all good. Better than good. It's amazing. Look at this place. This must have been some kind of hurricane shelter or something.'

'They don't have hurricanes around here.' Alex sighed, not seeing what was so amazing about this place; the stone walls thick with muck and grime that thankfully hadn't made it to the floor, obviously a sign of how long it had been since anyone had been down here.

'Maybe they used to.' Conner shrugged, sweeping his arm over the narrow tunnel that branched out in three distinct directions, with each one of those maybe connected to another three which would make this place a huge warren or labyrinth. 'What do I know. Maybe there was a village around here and they all sheltered down here. Does it really matter?'

'I suppose not.' Alex replied warily. 'I just hope you aren't going to go wandering around here. We could easily get lost.'

'Not far.' Conner promised. 'I don't want to get lost down here either. Let's just go round that corner and see how far it goes. We can always follow our pawprints out.'

Alex took a reflective glance at the floor, grudgingly admitting his friend was right. With the thick coating of dust that wasn't so much grey as a deep black they would easily be able to see their paw tracks. Still, it was with reluctance that he fell into step beside him. 'Why do you want to see how far it goes?'

'Think of the haunted house we could set up down here.' Conner called back over his shouldn't. 'Not this year I know. But next year, we could really make something awesome. As long as we set some markers not to go past, it would be fine.'

'Yeah, if we can get rid of the smell down here.' Alex's nose wrinkled. 'That's really rank.'

'Yeah..still...let this place air out, maybe some air fresenher and we are set.' Conner said, his tone of voice making it clear that he was set on making this work.

'I don't think that air fresh...did you hear that?' Alex said, his voice dropping to a soft whisper.

'Very funny.' Conner snickered without missing a step. 'Like I'm going to fall for that one.'

'No, seriously.' Alex glanced behind them, almost as if his gaze could penetrate the walls that lay between them and the exit. 'I thought I heard the stair creak.'

'Dude, you are jumping at shadows.' Conner scoffed. 'Come on. If this place is getting to you, lets..'

Head back. That had been what Conner had been going to say. Only for a heavy slam to echo around them, the sudden harsh noise making the both jump. And jump to the same conclusion.

'The hatch.' Both hyena's said in unison, having instantly leapt to not just the only conclusion but the worst conclusion.

'There is no way that could have fallen shut.' Alex whispered. 'It was resting flat on the floor. Did you tell anyone else we were coming here?'

'No. 'Conner replied, clearly trying to sound calm for his friend. But Alex knew him well enough to pick up on the anxiety in his voice. 'Look, maybe some forest ranger came along and closed the hatch thinking this place was empty. All we have to do is open it and climb out. Easy. If we asks why we are here, leave the talking to me.'

'Fine. Let's...Conner!!'

Alex's scream was well justified, a vision out of a nightmare looming around the corner behind his friend, all wrinkled and mottled skin, gangly limbs and monstrous teeth with scrawny wiry arms already reaching for them, the further of the two clamped around Conner's face before he could move or scream Which didn't stop him twisting to desperately reach for his friend before Alex felt a grip on his shirt and a lurch of moment before darkness claimed him.


'Conner!!' Alex repeated that shout the second he jerked back to consciousness, only vaguely aware that he had ever blacked out in the first place. To say nothing of why. He could have hit his head he supposed, even if he didn't feel the ache or throbbing he would have expected to have accompanied it. Perhaps his endorphins and adrenaline were keeping that at bay.

He certainly couldn't deny the adrenaline rippling through him now, the odd bitter taste in his mouth bubbling up to the first spark of real terror welling in his chest. Okay, so Conner was okay. Still breathing at least. He couldn't miss the soft rise of his chest even through his shirt tucked thankfully tight enough around his torso so as not to hide that reaction.

Sadly that was the only reassuring part of this whole situation, both the fact that they had been moved deeper into what he could only imagine was part of the basement and that they were literally stuck to the wall by some kind of sticky mass he didn't want to think about could not have been called reassuring by any means.

'Conner.' Alex called out again, risking raiding his voice a little. That really being the only way to wake his brother since he was glued to the next wall of the room that sat at right angles to him. Far out of reach of even a swift kick. Not that he had use of his legs. Not with the cloying mass clinging to him tightly. 'Conner. Wake. Up!'

'Fuck. You don't have to shout.' Conner snapped groggily, shaking his head. 'I..ohhh...shit. Where are we?'

'I don't know.' Alex admitted. 'Still in the basement I think. Can you move? We have to get out of here before that..thing comes back.'

'Tooo Laaate.' Alex froze mid struggle, that raspy voice sending icy chills right down his spine. Chills that didn't just come from the voice either. Now that he could get a proper look at this creature, as much as he didn't want too, he was able to absorb the hideous details he had missed before. Not just that gaping maw lined with those rows of viciously sharp teeth or the long spindly but wiry hands and arms. No, his gaze was drawn towards the scars that crisscrossed its deformed body, hideously looking like the results of some kind of surgery. And the open, unhealed and deeper wounds he didn't want to think about the cause off, some of both running around the saggy, unappealing mounds that could only be breasts given the puckered nipples that topped them.

'Jussst like itssss beeen tooo looong sinccce thhhis onne has suuchhh dellliccciouuus morrrsels.' The creature almost coo'd in some mocking mimicry of a soothing whisper. 'Soooo youuung annnd swwweet. Annnd..tender.'

'Oh god. Oh god oh god.' Conner struggled in abject terror, the creature stalking towards him as if obvious to his pleas. Or the panic fuelled shouts that Alex threw desperately into the mix.

'No. No. Don't you..leave him alone. Conner. Conner. No. I'll...urggh..no. Please don't.' Alex screamed in despiration, all the terror and panic welling up in him frustrated and bolstered at the same time by the heavy morass holding him that yielded but didn't break.

'Ohhh...iiittt willlll beeee youuur tuuurn sooonnn.' She replied. 'Butttt I wannnt thhhis onnne firrrst.'

If Alex had been scared before, now he was terrified. Beyond terrified, even if he really didn't know how to describe that. He couldn't anyway, his mind filled with terrible images of what was about to happen to his brother. Images he so much wanted to push away but couldn't despite that desperate will. 'No..please...please...don't..nooo.'

'Alex..Alex...nooo..help me.' Conner struggled as desperately and as in vain as his brother, only freezing when the monster loomed over him, locked in some terrible paralysis as her hand raised, razor sharp claws extended and glinting in the low light.

'Noooo.' Alex screamed again, straining with all his strength as the claw swung down...to slice right through the front of Conner's pants with only the harsh ripping of fabric followed by the soft clinking noise as the button bounced away who knew where.

'Ohh..shit.' Conner breathed, either in fresh anxiety or relief. Alex had no idea which really, far too grateful that the horrible things he had been imagining hadn't happened. 'What the hell do you want?'

'Youuuu.' The creature cocked its head almost curiously, like a puppy yet with a cold calculating intelligence in its eyes. That was what Alex saw anyway. Even if his eyes were playing tricks on him. There was no mistaking the intelligence and planning as the creature lowered one single claw to slice through the exposed materiel of his boxer shorts, pausing only to tug and tear the already ruined fabric of his jeans away to give her better access to her task. It was really only a matter of seconds before both his trousers and underwear lay in little more than useless scraps of cloth, the once tight waistband of his jeans now shoved crudely around his hips to expose his crotch and flaccid member.

Oddly enough it was at this that Alex blanched and looked away, somehow feeling he was invading his brothers privacy. Okay, it wasn't exactly willing and there was really nothing he could do about it. But that didn't stop him feeling what he felt.

Despite all that, despite all thoughts of taboo and decorum and lines not to be crossed, Alex couldn't help his gaze being dragged back to his brother as the monstrous creature lowered her head towards his crotch in some cruel parody of felatio. Cruel and certainly dangerous with those teeth. Conner must have had the same horrible thought..either then or he was just responding to the no doubt urgent instinct to get away given how he again started to struggle against the mass holding him.

Sadly it held fast and the still struggling hyena could do nothing to prevent the creatures mouth stretching wide, far wider than would be needed to envelop his cock. Only it didn't. Those cruel jaws hovering a bare inch from its prey, a ripple of movement heralded a long, prehensile and off pink tongue that didn't so much flick as glide over those razor sharp teeth in an attitude that could only be called anticipatory.

Anticipatory of what Conner barely had time to wonder about, his struggles renewing in his bonds. All of which did nothing to prevent that long appendage from gliding over his length, working up from his base to the very tip of his head in one quick lick.

'Fuck. Stop that.' Conner barked, his still limp penis now slicked with the creatures saliva that dripped and oozed along his length like a clear slime. Warm and sticky, it felt completely alien and disgusting in ways he had no words for. And yet..he couldn't ignore the slight tingle in his cock as the salvia cooled on his skin.

'Whhyyy? Youuur boddddy seeeems toooo likkkke itttt.' The creature rumbled in raspy pleasure that only made Conner shiver more. Especially as almost unwilling instinct tugged his head down to eye his crotch.

Instantly his eyes went wide with a dull horror, horror that only grew in time with the soft swelling of his cock that seemed to rise to attention without any conscious effort or will on his part. Just like the way it resisted his will and urging for it not to respond to whatever odd stimulus was making him hard. While he watched his cock had risen to through half mast to full erection to jut out above his balls urgently, his tip already glistening with a little moisture that didn't come from the creatures tongue.

'Seeee...isn'ttttt tttthat betterrrr.' The creature hissed, almost laughing softly as if she knew exactly what Conner was feeling at that moment. And maybe she did. Conner really had no answer, couldn't even think about that question as what had been a tingle of subtle pleasure grew into something much, much more. Despite himself and without any stimulation from his paws his cock twitched, literally jumping with a life of its own it had only shown before when he had a cute girl kneeling before him, only her breath teasing him with the promise of pleasure to come.

But there would be none of that pleasure here, none of the sweet delight of a warm, tight mouth softly sucking and worshipping his cock right to the edge of orgasm. Only unwilling, unwanted and yet undeniable pleasure that Conner neither sought but couldn't resist.

Pleasure rippled through him anyway as the tongue didn't so much lick as curl around his cock like a snake, coiling down from his tip to his base to leave him locked in the tight slimy embrace he couldn't help bucking against as instinctive reaction took over. Reaction that drove him to buck and roll his hips not away from but into the embrace that hugged him tightly, his balls rubbing against the base of the tongue that only tightened in response.

'Get off him.' Alex broke his stunned silence in the blink of an eye, not that he did blink. Or turn his head. Or do anything to prevent the hyena from watching his brother bucking his hips in uncontrollable and, or so he hoped, unwilling pleasure from the tongue surrounding his cock.

'Whyyyy.' The creature rumbled through a wide lipped and cruel grin, somehow vocalising without moving her mouth, which would surely have ripped her teeth through her prehensile tongue. 'Doesnnnn't heeee lookkkkk likkkke heeeee is enjoyyyyying ittttt? Heeee doesssss toooo meeee. I cannnnn feeeeeel himmmmm buckkkking unnnnder meeee.'

'Ohhh fuck....please.' Conner whimpered in what could only be called desperate lust, lust that unknown to his brother was being driven by the chemical soup that comprised the creatures saliva. One designed purely to drive her victim into a state of pure lust that was needed to catalyse its true purpose. 'Please...I need...ohhhhhhh fuck me..'

'Nottttt yettttt.' The creature growled, tugging a little harder on his cock to a whimper from Conner, his body stretched to the limit of his movement by the tongue coiling and relaxing around him, each pulse of moment drawing more pleasure from him. 'Nottt untillll heeeee isssss readdddy forrrrr meeee.'

'Ready?' Alex asked with a tremor in his voice, not entirely sure he wanted to know the answer to the question he was going to ask next but couldn't help asking anyway. 'How do you mean ready?'

'Jussst watttch.' The monster replied with a cruel laugh, tugging again at Conner's cock and making him whimper and moan so urgently.

'Watch wha...oh god.' Alex breathed in almost disbelief. Had his paws been free he would have covered his mouth or his eyes or..done something. But all he could do was watch in the almost horrific opposite of spell bound as Conner's hips bucked almost as if he was right on the verge of cumming, that movement sending a scattering of fur tumbling to the floor. Subtle as that was it took Alex all of two seconds to work out what he had seen, only really grasping it as the fur started to tumble from his feet and legs like each pore was shedding each single hair. Almost like some cruel mocking wave that process continued up his legs and over his torso waisting little time before reaching and climbing over his chest and along his face. Not that it stopped there either, the strange wave or whatever it was guiding this unwilling shedding continuing down his arms with the same pace as it claimed and discarded all the fur on his face right up to the tips of his ears.

Caught up as he was in his unwilling pleasure that still had him writhing on the edge of orgasm somehow denied, Alex had no idea if his brother was aware of the subtle mutilation that had overcome him or not. But Alex couldn't avoid the physical evidence of if his eyes presented him with, the very sight of his brother know no doubt completely hairless under the tattered remains of his clothes was almost sickening to him, seeming to have robbed him of all the uniqueness and personality he once had. Little did Alex know this was by far from the last change his friend would undergo, changes that would steal the last of his fursonality from him forever.

'Ahhhh.' Conner screamed, his back suddenly arched high as if caught in the throes of pleasure. Yet that scream wasn't one of pleasure. It wasn't pain either but something that rested between them both. Unseen by his brother his cock rippled and pulsed against the tightness surrounding it, but that wasn't the ripple of movement that most attracted Alex's attention.

No, it was the ripple that ran down his legs. Not a ripple of movement, of muscles tensing and relaxing as might occur naturally, but a ripple that ran through his skin with an unnatural ease almost like it was bubbling. That effect, already horrible to watch, only grew more pronounced with each passing second. Not just his skin rippling now but the muscles beneath. Rippling, swelling, almost bulging before the eyes of the horrified hyena. Horrified at the very fact that his brother was changing before his eyes, his legs now elongated to twice the length they had been, stretched and twisted to monstrous limbs ending in equally gnarled and monstrous toes.

Whatever effect had taken hold of him clearly wasn't satisfied with just that, the same rippling effect already having crept up to his torso, showing no sign of stopping. No matter how much he willed it to that effect. Almost as if mocking him and his terrified silent plea for this not to happen, the transformation sped up, the unearthly bubbling of muscle and flesh joined by an equally unearthly scream from Conner as his head snapped back. There was no resisting this, every inch of his body now writhing as the transformation took hold. Arms stretching, fingers lengthening, torso twisting to a scrawny shade of his former self. And his cock...that too wasn't spared. Growing and writhininb into something both erect and bulbous at the same time, the still twitching length suddenly released from the fleshy grip that surrounded it so that it might change in hindered. That wasn't the last change though. That was reserved for Conner's face, and it was the most terrible to behold.

Almost as a mirror image of each other his muzzle withdrew into his face, stretching to form a wide gaping maw even as his sharp canines and powerful incisors grew to viciously sharp pointed needles which formed a hideously mocking grin.

Alex couldn't help letting out a sob, a choke of desperate grief and pain as the last vestiges of his brother faded away, his once bright and warm eyes now replaced by cold dark orbs that revealed no trace of the person he had once been. He could only watch in now mute horror as the transformation finished with a roar from the creature that had been his brother, its body flexing to shatter the cocoon that had held it as easily as one might break a egg shell. It's..he couldn't think of it as he anymore..it's sinuous new muscles jerkily and awkwardly dragged it to its feet to stand and cast a cold glance over the single remaining hyena.

'Conner..no..' Alex choked, a single tear running down his cheek, doing little to express the full grief he felt at the loss of his closest friend, the one fur who had been in his life as long as he could remember.

If he had expected any response he was sorely disappointed as the newly transformed creature turned away from him and stalked towards the female, stopping inches from her to rub its head against hers. A tender display of affection that barely lasted a second before it shoved her roughly to the ground, grabbing her now upturned hips with a fierceness that could only mean one thing really.

One thing that was proved true, Alex forgotten as the creature speared the female deep with a roar of primal triumph as it gave into pure biological instinct to mate with her. Conner..the thing that had been Conner...was now driven by pure instinct that Alex couldn't have understood. A deep, primal and voracious instinct to breed now that a willing female was before it.

The tenderness shown by the female was in no way reciprocated, each of its thrusts harder and deeper than the last, the creature focused on nothing more or less than unloading its seed deep into the pussy that was no doubt milking its cock like a vice. The heavy, pounding slaps echoed around Alex in time with the creatures guttural roars of possessive pleasure, a sound so above furkind bliss as to be horrific in its own way.

The creatures fingers clenched tightly on the hips of it's willing mate, razor sharp claws drawing both trickles of deep crimson blood and equally deep screams of monstrous orgasmic relief as it didn't do much thrust as hold deep, letting nothing but the sweet tightness drive it's cock to a huge release that the female took with a roar of her own.

Tightly the creature held to it, rocking its hips to unload all of its seed to flood her womb, doing all it could to ensure a successful mating. Held closer for seconds that must have stretched to a full minute before it even thought about pulling away.

Sadly the female seemed to have other ideas, turning with a ferocious speed to drive her mate to the floor, driving its cock back into her pussy as her weight bore it down to the floor. Either through surprise or the need to exert dominance it roared and struggled, teeth snapping before the female clenched a hand around its throat. 'Ohhhhh nnnnno. Youuuu aaaare miiine untillll youuuu aaaare spenttttt.'

The creature beneath here clearly understood those words as it struggled again, helpless against the powerful hips that thrust her dripping pussy up and down over his still hard cock in a terrible parody of two furs going at it cowgirl style. A thrusting that pulled another unwilling growl of strained pleasure from its maw. But it wasn't that growl that Alex was listening too, not as the female fixed him with a possessive gaze that chilled both his blood and soul.

'Annnd thennnn litttttle furrrrr....I getttt tttto havvvvve youuuu.'